Here’s my Haibun Poem for Suzanne Burke’s ‘Fiction In A Flash Challenge’ Week #21 NEW Image Prompt!
A Haibun Poem combines a prose poem (the paragraph) and a Haiku/Senryu.
THE TRUTH
Wood slats replace the glass in my childhood home. Rocks and years have stripped away its beauty. Long ago, this empty house was full of life. People traveled great distances to attend the lavish parties. Our family was admired and respected until I disappeared. They hung my beloved husband for a crime he didn’t commit. Only I knew that, though, and no one heard my ghostly protests. Someday we’ll be reunited, but only after people finally learn the truth.
The house isn’t haunted
I only want to be found
My murderer died with me.
Well done, Denise. Now I want to explore the house and surroundings — to see if the narrator and her murderer can be found.
Thanks, Gwen ) I’m curious too.
My goodness, Denise! I loved your story which was so sad, tragic, and painful. Great job!
Thank you Karen. It left me wondering how many times something simlar happened.
Powerful poetry Denise! Truth is often trampled upon. That is a challenging prompt and you’ve handled it well.
Thanks Balroop. I sgree the truth isn’t always known, which is tragic.
I want to know who did it so a house search has to happen.
I’m curious too, John. This one is still whirling around my mind.
Write more. I see a whole book here.
I’m thinking about it. All I have to do is settle who the murderer is…but it is definitely lingering with me.
You can write your way into it. Let the characters develop the story
They do take the story over:)
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That poor woman and her husband. I hope the truth comes out!
I hope the truth comes out too Jacquie!
Hmmm….Sounds like this could turn into a book…….:)
My mind is still working through it and hasn’t let go yet.
Oh wow, Denise! That is PERFECT! And spooky too! Great job!
Thank you, Jan! A picture like this has so many possibilities I almost didn’t know what directoin to go 🙂
Thanks so much for this chilling Haibun, Denise. It’s a perfect addition to the prompt. I have scheduled it to be posted shortly. Thanks again for taking part. 😊
Thank you, Soooz..What a perfect picture it really got the creatives juices flowing.
I loved the image as soon as I saw it. Your great contribution will go up shortly. 😁
Fabulous Denise… that last line of the poem is chilling — you definitely must continue it!
eden
Thank you Eden 🙂 It’s hanging on, I’ll have to see what comes!
Hi Denise, not sure if my comment made it on your site. 🙁
Great take on the prompt – a chilling last line and I hope you continue this story!
Sorry Eden. Sometimes the comments take a while to show up, no idea why.
Wow, Denise, this Haibun holds so much potential to be a novel. Great job!! 🙂
Thank you, Miriam:) I’m still thinking about it, have to see what comes.
An idea for your next short story, Denise!!
This is a great take, Denise.
Thank you Robbie!
I just saw this on Soooz’s blog. It’s exceptional, Denise. There’s so much happening and so much story being told in your Haibun (which is a whole new form for me). Excellent job!!
Thank you, Mae:) I love combining a paragraph and poem to tell a story. I’ve had so much fun learning new formats it really stimulates creativity. Xo
There’s a lump in my throat after reading this. Well done with raw emotion.
Thank you Mark. I really felt this one and might dive deeper into soon.
💖💖 I also makes poetry and i hope you read it and by the way! Great poem