Here’s Suzanne Burke ‘Fiction In A Flash Challenge 2021’ Week #37.
I’m using the Haibun Poem format, which is a combination of a prose paragraph and a Haiku/Senryu.
Image by Arek Socha from Pixabay
THE DOOR
I grasped the small brass key tightly in my hand. The wooden door was now within my reach. It was the opening to the dreaded thirteenth colony. This is the place they sent people who asked too many questions. I glanced back into the darkness of what had been my existence. There had been no tears shed, and no one had stayed to say goodbye. I accepted I was no longer a part of their lives. My hand shook as I inserted the key and heard the click. Taking a deep breath, I pushed the door open. Vivid colors and a warm glow welcomed me into a place of beauty where my mother was waiting. Smiling, I shut the door on a world of fools.
Stepping into light
Leaving the dark cave behind
I found my answer.
Excellent, Denise.
Thanks, John 🙂
Wow! You are so prolific Denise. A lovely haibun. You would find me at such a place Denise, as too ask too many questions. 🙂
Thanks, Balroop:) I would definitely be there with you!
I like that it’s open-ended but still somehow uplifting. Nicely done, Denise.
Thanks, Staci. It reminded me of Plato’s Allegory of the Cave.
What a glorious place to enter. Beautiful, Denise!
It would be Miriam:) xo
🙂 🙂
I’d be in there with you, Denise. Always asking questions 🙂
Great take on the prompt! 🙂
Thanks, Harmony:) I’m always asking why and would be a great place to be.
I love this format!
Thanks, Kevin. It’s become one of my favorites.
This is such an uplifting take on the prompt! Thanks so much, Denise. I have just shared it with pleasure. 😊
Thanks, Soooz:) As always, a wonderful image to work from!
I’m so pleased you keep being inspired by them, my friend.😊
That’s a whole story in three lines, Denise. Nicely done.
Thanks, Jacqui. I enjoy trying to do that.
Oh, I loved this, Denise. You created a whole story in a few short words. You know this could make an amazing YA novel if you cared to dip your pen. Wink. Wink. Hint. Hint.
Thanks, Sandra. You’re right it certainly could…see if anything comes up with it.
Hi Denis , This reminds me of the magical wardrobe to Narnia. 🙂
Fab , have a great Sunday,
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Sorry *Denise* , my typing is awful!
I knew what you meant and have answered to Dennis most of my life…lol
Yes, I can see that, Eden. An entry into a magical world!
I really liked the way that one played out, Denise!
Thank you, Mae. It was a good door to open!
A beautiful haibun, Denise. I love the idea of risking the door and then finding a better world on the other side. Sometimes taking risks pays off. <3
Thanks, Diana:) So true we never know what else exists until we take that chance.
What a beautiful symbolic piece of writing. Just beyond that door is the unknown and I love what was on the other side!
Thank you, Jan. I feel like this is the life of authors always taking that chance and opening the door.
I love the promise you infused in this piece- beautiful <3
Thank you, Jacquie:) I will always believe there is that door waiting for us.
The unknown and the dreaded are not always so terrible. Thanks for conveying this, so well, Denise. 🙂
No they are not, Mark. Sometimes it is just what we need.
I enjoyed this haibun, Denise.
Thank you, Robbie 🙂